Well, that was super helpful. It goes way, way better if you actually do the activity rather than scroll social media for the minutes she is giving you to work on it. So, she lead you through three rewrites and then is asking you to rewrite the last example, which needed the most work. You can grab the assignment from under the video, complete the edit on the example and post it in your comment.
She is doing a really good job, and so are you! Keep up the good work.
Example 4 Commentary
ReplyDeleteLastly, these warm sentiments are reaffirmed at the very end of Adams’ letter when she confirms that the growth she is confident he will experience will “render [his] parents extremely happy, particularly [his] ever affectionate mother” (lines 61-63). She describes herself as “affectionate,” she is blatantly stating that she will always love him.
She communicates that she is very proud of the man he is already, and the virtues he exemplifies. She makes sure to end her letter on a positive note in order to convince him to continue his journey with an improved focus and perspective, for the sake of his parents if not himself.
Overall, her language choices create an overall attitude of encouragement, giving her son the incentive to go far and do what is right.
Example 4 Commentary
ReplyDeleteLastly, these warm sentiments are reaffirmed at the very end of Adams’ letter when she confirms that the growth she is confident he will experience will “render [his] parents extremely happy, particularly [his] affectionate mother” (lines 61-63.) Abagail describes herself as an “affectionate” mother, this of course shows that through all of the heart-aches, she will love him beyond all doubts. By this saying, it shows her care and concerns for her son, making her a trustworthy writer to believe in. These words also shape the mindset for John Quincy, because although he was hesitant to embark on a voyage of its caliber, he can now understand that not only is this trip to shape him into a man, but also to make proud his parents who are there to support him. These words by Abagail are used keenly to persuade John Quincy in order for both the audience and writer to achieve a good ends.
Lastly, these warm sentiments are reaffirmed at the very end of Adams’ letter when she confirms that the growth she is confident he will experience will “render [his] parents extremely happy, particularly [his] ever affectionate mother” (lines 61-63). She describes herself as “affectionate,” she is blatantly stating that she will always love him.
ReplyDeleteAbigail sees her son as a good man that has a lot of potential. She knows that John did not want to go on the trip, but encouraged him to accept all of the lessons that he will learn. The message that is conveyed in the letter is one of encouragement and advice for John Quincy Adams.
Lastly, these warm sentiments are reaffirmed at the very end of Adams’ letter when she confirms that the growth she is confident he will experience will “render [his] parents extremely happy, particularly [his] ever affectionate mother” (lines 61-63). She describes herself as “affectionate,” she is blatantly stating that she will always love him. By describing the happiness of her and his father, she is further convincing her son that they love him unconditionally. She also places this line at the end of the letter to end on a positive note and let her son be reassured of everything she has told him. Overall, Adams’ goal was to let her son know how much she cared for him, while still encouraging him to continue the journey, which she believes will ultimately make her and her son happy.
ReplyDeleteLastly, these warm sentiments are reaffirmed at the very end of Abigail’s letter when she confirms that the growth she is confident he will experience will “render [his] parents extremely happy, particularly [his] ever affectionate mother “(lines 61-63). She specifically describes herself as “affectionate,” once again reminding her son that she is very proud of him and will always love him. The fact that Abigail ends with a final note reminding him of his parents’ love and his ability to make them proud suggests that this is something that is important to him. He seeks their love and approval, and so by ending on this positive note, John Quincy Adams will be motivated to continue on his journey and embrace adversity in the name of growth.
ReplyDeleteLastly, these warm sentiments are reaffirmed at the very end of Adams’ letter when she confirms that the growth she is confident he will experience will “read his parents extremely happy, particularly his ever affectionate mother” (lines 61-63). She describes herself as “affectionate”, she is blatantly stating that she will always love him. Abigail makes sure to end her letter in a positive way, to make sure her son knows that she is very proud of the man he has become. She uses her letter to encourage her son to continue on his journey. She sends him a message full of advice and encouragement.
ReplyDeleteLastly, these warm sentiments are reaffirmed at the very end of Adams’ letter when she confirms that the growth she is confident he will experience will “render [his] parents extremely happy, particularly [his] ever affectionate mother” (lines 61-63). She describes herself as “affectionate,” she is blatantly stating that she will always love him.
ReplyDeleteAbigail believed in her son. She longs for his success. However, she wants him to know how momentous his voyage is. Adams truly believes he will gain a wealth of knowledge and experience. But in this, she is immensely proud of who her son has become. Adams sees Johns potential, and she, most definitely, knows he has a prosperous future ahead, as long as he believes in himself just the same.
Lastly, these warm sentiments are reaffirmed at the very end of Adams' letter when she confirms that the growth she is confident he will experience will "render [his] parents extremely happy, particularly [his] ever affectionate mother," (lines 61-63). Abigail describes herself as affectionate to remind her son that she is proud of him and confident in his abilities. She also includes that he is making his parents happy to motivate him to continue on. Her choice of words, especially at the end of the letter, create an emotional and encouraging message for John Quincy Adams.
ReplyDeleteExample #4 Commentary:
ReplyDeleteLastly, these warm sentiments are reaffirmed at the very end of Adams’ letter when she confirms that the growth she is confident he will experience will “render [his] parents extremely happy, particularly [his] ever affectionate mother” (lines 61-63). “Affectionate” is what Abigail Adams subtly refers to herself as. With this last line, she hopes her son will remember how loved he is.
Adams continuously reinforces her love for John Quincy, her overseas son, as a way to show him she will back him up no matter what. By her word choice, the reader can tell Adams has confidence in her son’s good virtues he has developed in adolescence. Perhaps John Quincy may still be unsure of himself, but his mother makes it clear in her letter that she does not doubt him.
Due to her blatant encouragement and empathic language, John Quincy would be more inclined to not be as hard on himself. After all, he has his parents’ support, which is the most important thing for a child who is blossoming into an adult.
Lastly, these warm sentiments are reaffirmed at the very end of Adams’ letter when she confirms that the growth she is confident he will experience will “render [his] parents extremely happy, particularly [his] ever affectionate mother” (lines 61-63). She describes herself as “affectionate,” she is blatantly stating that she will always love him. Abigail continues to persuade John Quincy by using her and his father’s emotional appeal. She will unconditionally love him, irregardless. This gives insight into John Quincy’s motivations and influences. Overall, her language choices create an overall attitude of encouragement, giving her son the incentive to go far and do what is right.
ReplyDeleteLastly, these warm sentiments are reaffirmed at the very end of Adams’ letter when she confirms that the growth she is confident he will experience will “render [his] parents extremely happy, particularly [his] ever affectionate mother” (lines 61-63). She describes herself as “affectionate,” she is blatantly stating that she will always love him.
ReplyDeleteJohn Quincy Adams' mother makes it clear she will always be there to support him. She will always have his best interests at heart and will want him to be safe and happy. Her language shows that she is using emotion to allow him to be easier on himself. she is proud of his constant success, and her approval is most important to John.